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Submitted: July 30, 2012
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unluckiest dressing pt1by ~Vytz

Fan Art / Cartoons & Comics / Digital / Movies & TV

this idea was given by :iconemeralddarkknigh: say thanks to him

Edit fixed mistakes in dialoges. Thanks to

and

for helping me with it.

~Crosswire40 Jul 31, 2012

First Panel Top left Page: When JJ says"And this is outfit our little Max will wear at AnimeCon" it should be "And this is THE outfit our little Max will wear at AnimeCon." Not sure if there should be a the before "AnimeCon"

Liz says "JJ you are totally sick person" you left out the A that would make it "JJ you are a totally sick person"

Also you forgot to capitalize the I in "But I must admit that, it looks cute" I'm not sure if there needs to be a , in that sentence but I belief it works.

Right Panel Top Left: You need to capitalize the letters at the start of sentences like the "what" and "don't"
"My" shouldn't be capitalized in the middle of JJ's sentence.

"here" should also be captalized since it comes after a exclamation point

Bottom Left Panel: Looks good, not spelling errors.

Bottom Right Panel: "need" should be "needs

That's all the errors I can see on this page.

~Vytz Sep 29, 2012

fixed thanks

~barmoth Jul 31, 2012

Can't find any typos or mistakes.

Thank you comic looks quite fun and interesting.

~Vytz Sep 29, 2012

fixed thanks

~AndrewWong Jul 31, 2012

Where's the picture of Max wearing THAT outfit on Animecon XD

~Vytz Jul 31, 2012

Max ripped and burned them

~dis0guise Jul 31, 2012

I see by looking at the rest of this that nobody wears that beautiful mask... Still, it's all beautifully drawn, even though I'd rather it had gone another way.

~Othalo Aug 2, 2012

I agree! I agree!
But the rest of the comic is still awesome!
We love you vytz!

~Vytz Jul 31, 2012

thanks

~Crosswire40 Jul 31, 2012

First Panel Impressions: Very nice! I can see you've improved quite a lot! Your work on the characters is immensely improved and that Maid suit in the top left corner looks so nice... :L

Very nice, going onto the next page!

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