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Just capitalize the W in Liz's "what".
Top Right Corner: This one is pretty good. Liz's speech bubbles are fine, all you need to do for JJ is replace the "a" with a "the" so it reads" I have the same problem!"
Bottom Left: Also pretty good, just take out the extra l in "tallk" and add a "s" at the end of Liz's "My hand became paws!!!!" so it reads "My hands became paws!"
Bottom Right: For Max you need to add in a " 're" at the end of "you" so it reads "Oh? I see that you're almost dressed for AnimeCon."
Add a "e" to "pices "to" and a "the" in Max's last line so it reads "I almost forgot to give you the last pieces of your suits"
That's all for this one! The last panel is A-OK.
I hope I didn't come off like a grammar Nazi or anything. I love your artwork and suiting TF/TG's, I just want your stuff look and read well.
Second panel . even if I'd say as Liz or even dropped "a" article but same rules state "I have the same problem."
both of them have some specific problem.
Third panel past perfect would fit better. "my hands have become hands". The action have been done in near past and have bearing impact on present. In fact I think they lost their voice and hands while was trying to get suit off.
Fourth panel same as third "I see you almost have been dressed". "that" usually dropped. Also not really sure is it correct from point of complex sentences grammar.
"Almost forgot" for more slang like or "I have almost forgotten."
I love how the zippers drop off the suits and they get stuck inside. Classic suiting trap.
I have to ask, but were the suits specifically designed to seal the wear inside, puff up the hands into paws and keep them from talking or was that something Max added in?
Also, would these suits work on males?